E-portfolio Writing: My camp Experience:

Describe It - Camp Experiences

Learning Objectives:

Level 3

• Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
• Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.
• Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.
• Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.

Level 4.

• Select, develop, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
• Use a range of language features appropriately, showing an increasing understanding of their effects.
• Organise texts. Using a range of appropriate structures.
• Show an increasing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.

Learning goals:

• To ‘Show, Don’t Tell’ the reader by painting a picture with words.
• A variety of sentence starters
• A variety of sentence lengths
• Edit and rework
• Effective peer checking and feedback

Climbing up the steps putting on the harness running off the edge and swing all way down. Feeling your heir blow throw the wind. As you go down the flying fox you see the people watching you go down you feel like a bird. The tree's swing from side to side you hear yourself scream as you go down. You were so scared to go down but now you're happy

Student Reflection: In my writing, one of my goals is write sentences that have mostly correct grammar. did not show this goal because I think I still need some work on spilling but I'm getting better. In my writing, one of my goals is use capital letters and punctuation correctly. did not show this goals because I don't I get it yet but I'm getting there. My next step is to listen to and act on feedback from others. Teacher Comment: MJ, you have written a short but effective moment in time here. You've described the way it felt to go on the flying fox. Your next step is to use language features like similies and metaphors for impact.